The Circle of Life


Ron65
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A thought popped into my mind of how life comes around in one eternal circle and wrote this little free form poem to record that pondering. I only spent about 20 minutes on the poem and would like some feedback on its content, structure and flow etc. For those who may not know, free form must have rhyme but it's not rhyme set to a fixed pattern as found in traditional poetry, therefore the poet has the freedom to place them wherever he or she wishes.

I was once but a spirit,

two thoughts in my parent’s minds,

intertwined,

mingled with love

that became flesh,

a babe in their arms

a bundle of joy,

a boy, that grew to ponder such things

with thoughts of my own

intertwined with wings of another

mingled with love

to become flesh,

a babe of our own,

a bundle of joy.

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