Magen_Avot Posted January 17, 2013 Report Posted January 17, 2013 (edited) The pitter patter of endless rain Each drop is self contained and hitting the ground unites itself with other drops that fall about together they run as rivers and streams and crushing waterfalls then as seas Flowers bloom because of rain and gardens grow and fishes swim because of rain so don't you fret because of rain because you'll bloom and grow because of rain and problems too they're all the same Edited January 19, 2013 by Magen_Avot added a part I had forgotten Written in 1981 on Mission Quote
Ron65 Posted January 24, 2014 Report Posted January 24, 2014 This is an interesting free form poem with strong rhyme. Using the same word as an end of line rhyme tends to spoil a poem, but having said that, in your poem I feel it adds something; it creates the feel of persistent raining which is echoed in the repeated use of the word 'rain. Thank for you sharing. Quote
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