Who is a pro at Grammar and Punctuation?

[AngelonaWing]

I have a friend who has written some articles and she says she had one that keeps coming back.. She is a French Canadian so her English is not up to par.

if someone could take a look and help me with this I would appreciate it! As soon as possible?

This is what she is requesting:

I have been submitting an over 10 articles and all the others were accepted but this one was rejected 5 times in a row cause they keep saying there is no proper english and grammar errors....it is a small article and been review it over and over but cannot see what is wrong with it. Could you have a check up pls and highlight the mistakes and tell me what should it be.

Thank you with much love,

The text:

Being positive and change your attitude. Our society is fulfilled with arguments, so many reason are brought forward to excuse ourselves. We are prompt in the negativism. Here are some tips to learn how to change this negative attitude to a positive one.

• When the argument start, stand back or run away

• Let the person talk or expose her idea

• If you are caught in it, just ignore and think of something happier

• Smile and say: You might be right but let me understand more what you just said.

• Find qualities in the person facing you

• Ask yourself: Is it worth to fight about it?

Do you have to prove something to anyone? There is war everywhere in this world. There is also a lot of innocence looking at a children smile, having to choose between two of them I would prefer the second choice. Now you have your tips, they are easy to follow, just take a step at the time. We have to learn how to interact with others not to be on the defensive all the time. We have to be more peaceful, being able to accept others ideas or opinion. We cannot be always right we have to improve. By listening to other voice we are choosing to change our attitude, to make compromise for the better. This is all part of our new ''Me''. Nothing is easy but slowly a step at the time you will see the difference in your life when it is time to interact with them.

[AngelonaWing]

OK WHO is a pro...... not How! sheesh!

[marshac]

Seeing it in french might help since i'm having to guess as to the deeper meaning of some of the sentences. I THINK I know what she's trying to say, but I don't want to misrepresent what she's getting at.

[pam]

Okay just my person opinion.

Break this sentence into two.

Our society is fulfilled with arguments, so many reason are brought forward to excuse ourselves.

Our society is filled with arguments. So many reasons are brought forward to excuse ourselves.

Or perhaps : Our society is filled with arguments. However, we find many reasons to excuse ourselves.

Change the wording on this one somewhat.

Smile and say: You might be right but let me understand more what you just said.

Smile and say: You may be right but let me make sure I understand what you are saying.

Edited February 19, 2009 by pam

[pam]

• Ask yourself: Is it worth to fight about it?

Ask yourself: Is it worth it to fight about it?

[marshac]

I'll play too- who needs the french. :)

"We are prompt in the negativism. Here are some tips to learn how to change this negative attitude to a positive one."

We are quick to focus on the negative. Here are some tips to help shift a negative attitude to a positive one.

"When the argument start, stand back or run away "

When an argument begins, extricate yourself

[pam]

Let the person talk or expose her idea

Let the person speak and express her ideas.

[pam]

There is also a lot of innocence looking at a children smile, having to choose between two of them I would prefer the second choice.

There is also a lot of innocence looking at a child smile. When having to choose between the two of them, I would prefer the second choice.

[pam]

Now you have your tips, they are easy to follow, just take a step at the time.

Now you have your tips. They are easy to follow by taking one step at a time.

[pam]

Come on Marshac..I thought you were playing too. hahahaha

[pam]

We have to learn how to interact with others not to be on the defensive all the time.

We need to learn how to interact with others and not feel defensive.

[Snow]

I have a friend who has written some articles and she says she had one that keeps coming back.. She is a French Canadian so her English is not up to par.

if someone could take a look and help me with this I would appreciate it!

I only read the first three sentences and they are all faulty:

1.Being positive and change your attitude.

>That's not a complete sentence and verbs "being" and "change" are not in the same tense.

2.Our society is fulfilled with arguments, so many reason are brought forward to excuse ourselves.

> The correct word is "filled" not "fulfilled." The sentence expresses two separate thoughts and could be broken up into separate sentences or reworked into one cogent thought.

3.We are prompt in the negativism.

>That's an odd sounding sentence. It would be better to say something like: "We are quick to respond negatively."

[pam]

We cannot be always right we have to improve

Part of improving is realizing we are not always right.

[pam]

Wooohoooooo Snow my man. How in the heck are you?????????

[pam]

Okay anyone feel feel to tear apart my rewrite. hahahaha

We need to learn to be positive and change our attitude. Our society is filled with arguments. However, we find many reasons to excuse ourselves. We are quick to respond negatively. Here are some tips to learn how to change negative attitude into a positive one.

When an argument begins, extricate yourself.

Let the person speak and express her ideas.

Think happier thoughts when caught up in it.

Smile and say: You may be right but let me make sure I understand what you are saying.

Find positive qualities in the person you are facing.

Ask yourself: Is it worth fighting about?

D o you have to prove yourself to anyone? There is war everywhere in this world. There is also an innocence when looking at a child smile. When having to choose between the two of them, I would prefer the second choice.

Now you have your tips. They are easy to follow by taking one step at a time. We need to learn how to interact with others and not feel defensive. We have to be more peaceful by being able to accept other ideas and opinions. One way to improve is to realize we cannot always be right. By choosing to listen to other opinions, we are changing our attitude. Compromise always works for the better. This is all part of the new “Me.” Nothing in life is easy. However, we will see a difference in our own lives by learning to interact effectively with others.

Edited February 19, 2009 by pam

[Maxel]

I'll readjust it a little; I hope to keep the flow and thoughts of the words. If you don't like it or were looking for something else, kindly disregard the following.

The text:

Being positive and change your attitude. Our society is fulfilled with arguments, so many reason are brought forward to excuse ourselves. We are prompt in the negativism. Here are some tips to learn how to change this negative attitude to a positive one.

• When the argument start, stand back or run away

• Let the person talk or expose her idea

• If you are caught in it, just ignore and think of something happier

• Smile and say: You might be right but let me understand more what you just said.

• Find qualities in the person facing you

• Ask yourself: Is it worth to fight about it?

Do you have to prove something to anyone? There is war everywhere in this world. There is also a lot of innocence looking at a children smile, having to choose between two of them I would prefer the second choice. Now you have your tips, they are easy to follow, just take a step at the time. We have to learn how to interact with others not to be on the defensive all the time. We have to be more peaceful, being able to accept others ideas or opinion. We cannot be always right we have to improve. By listening to other voice we are choosing to change our attitude, to make compromise for the better. This is all part of our new ''Me''. Nothing is easy but slowly a step at the time you will see the difference in your life when it is time to interact with them.

My very rough translation. Here I am keeping changes to an absolute minimum, so as to let her original tone flow through.

Be positive and change your attitude! Our society is full of arguments, so many reasons are brought forward to excuse ourselves. We are quick to be negative. Here are some tips to learn how to change this negative attitude to a positive one:

• When the argument starts, take a step back or leave

• Let the person talk and explain his/her idea

• If you are caught in the middle of it, just ignore the arguing and think of something happier

• Smile and say: "You might be right; help me understand better what you just said."

• Find good qualities in the person you are arguing with

• Ask yourself: Is the issue worth fighting about?

Do you have to prove something to anyone? There is war everywhere in this world. There is also a lot of innocence, like looking at a child's smile. If I had to choose between the two of them, I would prefer the second choice.

Now you have your tips! They are easy to follow, just take it one step at the time. We have to learn how to interact with others and not to be on the defensive all the time. We have to be more peaceful, that is accomplished by being able to accept others' ideas or opinions. We cannot always be right, we have to improve. By listening to others' voices we are choosing to change our attitude, to make a compromise for the better. This is all part of our new ''Me''. Nothing is easy, but slowly, a step at a time, you will see the difference in your life when it is time to interact with others.

I hope that helps. I'm not an expert in spelling or grammar, but I'm 99.99% positive what I've just presented is technically correct, though it doesn't flow very well. Edited February 19, 2009 by Maxel

[Maxel]

Okay anyone feel feel to tear apart my rewrite. hahahaha

We need to learn to be positive and change our attitude. Our society is filled with arguments. However, we find many reasons to excuse ourselves. We are quick to respond negatively. Here are some tips to learn how to change negative attitude into a positive one.

When an argument begins, extricate yourself.

Let the person speak and express her ideas.

Think happier thoughts when caught up in it.

Smile and say: You may be right but let me make sure I understand what you are saying.

Find positive qualities in the person you are facing.

Ask yourself: Is it worth fighting about?

D o you have to prove yourself to anyone? There is war everywhere in this world. There is also an innocence when looking at a child smile. When having to choose between the two of them, I would prefer the second choice.

Now you have your tips. They are easy to follow by taking one step at a time. We need to learn how to interact with others and not feel defensive. We have to be more peaceful by being able to accept other ideas and opinions. One way to improve is to realize we cannot always be right. By choosing to listen to other opinions, we are changing our attitude. Compromise always works for the better. This is all part of the new “Me.” Nothing in life is easy. However, we will see a difference in our own lives by learning to interact effectively with others.

I love it! However, it is definitely the article via pam- that is, the author's original voice is lost in this rewrite.

However, that's my only qualm with it: in grammar/spelling and presentation it garners A's in my personal book'o'grading.

[pam]

The way it was originally written is extremely poor grammar. I realize there is the translation issue probably with the French. All I was doing was offering my help as requested. Since there was the issue of 5 rejections. Whether they use it or not...up to them. Doesn't hurt my feelings at all.

[AngelonaWing]

Hmmmmmmmmm She wants it done in ENGLISH not French............. Or do you speak french???

[Snow]

Wooohoooooo Snow my man. How in the heck are you?????????

Good thank you. All is well here.

I've taken time off to study early Christianity among other things.

My daughter at BYU is dancing the lead in Romeo and Juliet. I hear that her picture is on those giant posters on the side of buses driving around town.

How are you?

[pam]

I"m doing great...How is the new house? When is the Romeo and Juliet performance? My daughter also studies ballet. Would be fun to go watch it.

[pam]

Hmmmmmmmmm She wants it done in ENGLISH not French............. Or do you speak french???

No French knowledge here. Unless champagne and escargot count.

[AngelonaWing]

PAM I like what you rewrite..... most EDITOR"S would to that anyway. I am going to send this to her and see what she thinks.........

Maxel I will send her what you did as well.

[Dr T]

Pammy, no more multiple posts in a row. 5 in a row, 3 in a row... u post padder u!

[Maxel]

PAM I like what you rewrite..... most EDITOR"S would to that anyway. I am going to send this to her and see what she thinks.........

Maxel I will send her what you did as well.

Pam's is much better, I suggest using hers. My central concern was to preserve the original author's tone- which comes across very... uneducated, when it's translated to English from French.