Ron65 Posted January 29, 2014 Report Posted January 29, 2014 A thought popped into my mind of how life comes around in one eternal circle and wrote this little free form poem to record that pondering. I only spent about 20 minutes on the poem and would like some feedback on its content, structure and flow etc. For those who may not know, free form must have rhyme but it's not rhyme set to a fixed pattern as found in traditional poetry, therefore the poet has the freedom to place them wherever he or she wishes.I was once but a spirit,two thoughts in my parent’s minds,intertwined,mingled with lovethat became flesh,a babe in their armsa bundle of joy,a boy, that grew to ponder such thingswith thoughts of my ownintertwined with wings of anothermingled with loveto become flesh,a babe of our own,a bundle of joy. Quote
aeglyn Posted January 30, 2014 Report Posted January 30, 2014 I really enjoyed this one, Ron. Nice weaving of thought process and life progression here. Good work! Quote
Ron65 Posted February 1, 2014 Author Report Posted February 1, 2014 Keep up the good work Ron65What - keep posting, writing or creating families? Thank you for reading. Quote
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