decafdarcy

Whilst I appreciate your input, I will not be removing the mormon aspect from this story. The story was made before I even found out about the beehive symbolism - I added that in afterwards and realised how well fitting the metaphor of bees would be. The story is based on one of my sisters friends who lives across the road from us, which this exact thing happened to. She decided to leave the church as she didnt agree with views and the restrictions they put on her life, and her mother didnt like it and essentially shunned her. The story will not change or lose the mormon symbolism or anything. I don't think it needs fixing at all.

You're right, she is definitely a follower, as she is young, and has never had her own life, but escaping with her new 'queen' will give her the opportunity to live as herself for once, which is like the 'selling' point for her. She's not necessarily admirable, but she's real. She has flaws.

I am about a 7. I have just been reading the responses. I am very curious as I want to represent the religion respectfully in my film, and I do find it very interesting.

I am about a 7. I have just been reading the responses. I am very curious as I want to represent the religion respectfully in my film, and I do find it very interesting.

The story does follow a girl leaving behind her religion but the story is more symbolic than literal, and it more portrays the abuse she experiences under the rule of her mother, which is seperate entirely from the religion. The whole thing is a metaphor for bees - the main character is a worker bee, loyal to her queen (her mother and her religion) until a new queen comes along, (a young girl called Zahri) who is younger and more powerful and challenges her allegiance. In the end she overthrows the current queen and follows the new one to a new colony. She does not abandon her faith, as she is quite devout and even after she leaves her mother she still follows the lifestyle she always did. It does deal with sexuality and her struggles to accept her feelings for her new queen as something more tham platonic, but it is not a disrespect of the religion, hence why I came on here, not wanting to inaccurately portray it. I will consider removing the prayer from the script if you think it is not a good idea to include it.

I live in Australia, so it is not a very faith heavy country to start with and has a very small population of LDS followers. There is one church in my city but it is too far away for me to visit, as I don't drive hahah.

Thankyou for this suggestion. Unfortunately I live in a very un-mormon area, and there are basically 0 churches any where near me, but If i do ever find one in my state I will look into it.

Thankyou for this template. This will be incredibly helpful.